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Really good paper in my opinion. The one thing that caught me off guard was the rough transition between the general teaching style and the paragraph where you begin discussing symbiosis. I know that you are most interested in the teaching style, but there has to be some easier way to incorporate the symbiosis, cuz what you have seems a little bit abrupt. Also, there wasn't much symbiosis in the introduction… Not sure how you would go about handling that, I guess it all depends on how much of the paper you will be cutting out. Just make sure if you are going to give as much attention as you currently are to the symbiosis studies that you include something about that in your introduction.

Big Picture by Chad ClancyChad Clancy, 02 Dec 2008 02:32

In the paragraph with the semicolons when defining some of the terms used in this paper, i would consider utilizing a colon and listing those items… the semicolon really seems to break things up, but that might just be a person opinion.

by Chad ClancyChad Clancy, 02 Dec 2008 02:21

Well-written paper and very informative.

I made a few corrections on a hard copy that I will give you in class. Steer clear of using "that" in formal writings because it sounds very informal.

Hope this helps you out!

Cassaundra

by crr005crr005, 02 Dec 2008 02:03

This paper was very informative and I really enjoyed reading it.

There were a few places where your word choice didn't quite make sense, and I'll hand you a hard copy with my corrections in class on Wednesday to do what you will with them. :)

Hope it helps!

Cassaundra

by crr005crr005, 02 Dec 2008 02:00

I really liked this paper and how you tied in solutions to problems with nitrogen-fixation.

There were a few places where I wasn't quite sure what you meant, but I'll hand you a hard copy in class on Wednesday.

Good work.

Cassaundra

by crr005crr005, 02 Dec 2008 01:57

Overall this is a great paper. I corrected on a hard copy which I will give to you in class on Wednesday for the grammatical errors that I saw.

You really need to be aware of your abbreviation usage. You tend to switch back and forth between abbreviating and not, so you should pick one way to do it and stick with that way. The exception would be in places like your conclusion where you're making a point to use the extended version.

Hope this was helpful!

Cassaundra

by crr005crr005, 02 Dec 2008 01:51

you have a very good start to this paper. I would be careful when you use the word bacterium. Sometimes it doesn't match with other words in the sentence. I think you should use the word bacteria in a lot of places.

by jbruningjbruning, 19 Nov 2008 16:06

very good paper…it was interesting and kept my focus. Be careful with grammar and wording though.

First paragraph under CF… say "it has been proposed" instead of it is possible"

when you talk about salt concentrations, you say "before the sweat chloride test….unknown reasons, of CF" this is awkwardly worded. the next paragraph you say "however, in indiiduals…it should be moving, as well" there is a subject/verb disagreement.

In your conclusion, I would refrain from using "I don't think" or "I believe." you can still voice your opinion about it using other words.

Overall, good paper

by jbruningjbruning, 15 Nov 2008 23:14

This was a well written paper. Very easy to follow and thorough. couple of suggestions: in the first paragraph, "it accomplishes this feat….temperate and tropical regions" it sounds like a run on sentence. I would make 2 sentences out of it or reduce it.

The paragraph before "after colonization" is really good but I'd like to know more if you can find anything…especially about how V. fischeri alter the chemistry of the mucus.

Also, when you talk about anaerobic and aerobic respiration, why do scolopes only want anaerobic to persist.

Then the LPS destroys cells in the light organ as well as other things. Is this like our epithelial cells that are continually dividing because so many are dying. I would elaborate on this a little.

Overall, very good paper. I enjoyed reading it.

by jbruningjbruning, 15 Nov 2008 23:06

HAHA Chad!!!

by crr005crr005, 26 Oct 2008 17:27

I would think technically she still has CF because it is a genetic disease NOT a pathogenic disease… According to this article, CF affects more than just lung function too… so she probably has more symptoms than what we would normally think even though these symptoms are probably going unnoticed because we aren't in a worldwide cholera epidemic.

I'm curious as to how a normal channel functions compared to how a cystic fibrosis channel functions. I know that a hopeful evolutionary advantage would be that the channel function would be a happy medium… but the reality is that that probably isn't the case based upon this current research. I would be MORE interested to see what the mutated channel does compared to the knock-out channel. I would think that the mutated channel would have a more interesting affect on normal cell secretory function depending on how that channel is put into the membrane. Where does the mutation of the channel occur? Obviously this channel is a membrane channel, so is the mutation in a binding region with an anchor protein, or is it in an area that directly affects cell function?

Channel Function by Chad ClancyChad Clancy, 22 Oct 2008 13:55

My second cousin has/had cystic fibrosis but she had a double lung transplant years ago. Does she still have cf? She doesn't have the symptoms anymore because she has different lungs, but wouldn't she still have it in her genes?

Just a question... by Cass by crr005crr005, 19 Oct 2008 19:10

in the genome of someone who has CF, is there just a mutated base pair at F508 or is there an insertion or deletion at the locus. if there is an insertion or deletion, how many base pairs are substituted or deleted. if it is just a bp substitution then what bp is substituted for what? If it is a number of bp are inserted or deleted, is there a loop that forms in the DNA b/c the strands aren't complimentary at this locus and if so will that have a major or minor change to the secondary structure of the DNA?

by jbruningjbruning, 16 Oct 2008 13:11

What type of reference would you have liked me to post. I am merely putting up my answers and so if you don't trust them, which you have no reason to trust them, then don't use them. I agree with you about the Syn/Atn. This would be a great forum for which we may learn from each other. Ball's in your court.

colin out…

Colin is fo' shizl the rizl. by colino712colino712, 08 Sep 2008 19:13
O Collin
Chad ClancyChad Clancy 07 Sep 2008 18:55
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Collin, I find it quite comical that you went to all this work to post vocab, but thanks for adding a reference to check against. I also talked to robson about antonyms and synonyms, and you can provide experiences and/or persons in these categories as long as you can actually recognize the connection. I find that this idea may be more useful than providing dictionary definition words because you may understand a circumstance or a person BETTER than the dictionary… well at least i do!
~chad

O Collin by Chad ClancyChad Clancy, 07 Sep 2008 18:55
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