crr005 02 Dec 2008 01:51
Overall this is a great paper. I corrected on a hard copy which I will give to you in class on Wednesday for the grammatical errors that I saw.
You really need to be aware of your abbreviation usage. You tend to switch back and forth between abbreviating and not, so you should pick one way to do it and stick with that way. The exception would be in places like your conclusion where you're making a point to use the extended version.
Hope this was helpful!
Cassaundra